By the blue window

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  1. berseh Well-Known Member

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    At first she had been a bit surprised when he said he would really like her to bend against the window, with only her top covered while he went out. He cajoled and pleaded she takes off her skirt and panties, saying one of his secret fantasies was looking up from the sidewalk at a girl by her window, knowing she was half exposed, that it would be a first for him.
    Would she grant him this favor?
    She hesitated a second or two, and agreed.
    Why not?
    She had met him two days ago and he had been surprising anyway, so she felt going along with games was a fun way to get to know him more.
    He insisted that whatever, she would just stay like this, the upper part of her body visible until he came back.

    But then when he left, she didn't understand why he took with him her skirt and panties that she had dropped on the floor. She was not sure she liked it either when she clearly heard the sound of the key on the door, not forbidding access to the rest of his appartment.
    Soon though she saw him in the street, under the window, pretending he was just looking at the shops, but lifting his eyes to her, once, twice, more. She could see his efforts not to smile to her.

    She surely hadn't expected it but, looking at other passerbys in the street just three floors below, as she was rubbing her thighs against each other, listening to the silky stockings, feeling the cool air on her behind, well..
    Playfully, sure that if she was careful, no one else than him could guess, she opened her little blouse and sent a kiss at the delighted face he made.
    She smiled when he very casually walked into the bakery that was almost across the building he had left her in.
    He came out empty-handed.
    Two minutes later, when she heard the entrance door discreetly bang, she realized she was quite aroused by then, so she took a deep breath, modified her pose, doing her best to be sexy and ingenuous at the same time (you people know what I mean).
    Soon, as she heard the key unlocking the room, she turned her eyes, smiling, to the door.

    She didn't give much attention to the cane in his hand when, to her shocked disbelief, she saw the stern, severe black-clothed couple behind him, looking at her.

    - So what do you think, he asked them? You buyers?
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  2. Laspe Well-Known Member

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    Intriguing writing, and I like the introduction of the cane in the last line, as well as the couple. Not quite sure what “You buyers?” refers to. Is that the question for the readers, for the couple, or the idea was to leave it up to us?
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  3. berseh Well-Known Member

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    Thank you very much Laspe, for your comment and for having come here in the confined, forlorn "stories" department.:)
    "You buyers" is a question asked to the couple.
    This was my very first try at writing a story in english, and my very first try at writing a hopefully erotic little story.
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  4. Laspe Well-Known Member

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    Got you on the question, and you are very welcome.
  5. TawnyT Tawny Tomsen [_________________________] [__________]

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    I loved this story the first time I read it in the other universe. Your stories are just exciting and captivate the readers each time. Especially the feelings you convey are just great.

    I love your stories my darling. :heart:
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    I red this short story just now. I like it as it is here. The following can be soft or harsh, depending on the imagination of the reader. The main character is quite well traced but not her reaction to the last words. Everything is possible. The story can go on as she expected, more or less, or go too far to allow her to remain in control. The atmosphere of suspension and thin and a little dark half-transparency, increasing row by row in this unfinished tale, where only the last row contains a significant event, is for me fascinating.
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  8. berseh Well-Known Member

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    Thank you passo.
    This was my first story+photo ever, posted in DA. Unfortunately it's a bit difficult to post long narratives (more than 2000 characters! :( ) in the gallery here in erolair. @Punkae said she'd try modifying this but as yet it hasn't come so I don't post anything any more here. Just waiting.
  9. passocorto Member

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    I wrote you that I like as it is. Sometimes I try to imagine how could be a story of yours associated with a drawing of mine, but I figure that you have maybe a sensitivity unfit for that. I will explain and ask your opinion more clearly by a conversation apart, only if you agree.
  10. berseh Well-Known Member

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    Okay